Renhai Studio Archives

A Collection of Renhai by members of The Renhai Studio

The First Time

A Renhai by Betty Kaplan (bk) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

First time milking —
he squeezes hard but
nothing comes. /vs

Home from the strawberry farm — /bk
each finger stained winy red. /vs

Bake class 101 —
small noses coated in flour,
dough ready for tarts. /bk

Archive Id: 14
Betty Kaplan: USA
Vaughn Seward: Canada
Written:: April 21-22, 2008

Theme: Food Collection/Preparation
Season: Summer
Kigo: Strawberry picking
Verse Form: Free
Process: Forward

Links 1/2a: Farm.
Links 1/2b: Fingers.
Links 2a/3: Strawberry/Tart.
Links 2b/3: Body part covered/stained.
Links 3/1: Learner(s)

Notes: This renhai is unique in that it was suggested by Betty that the three-line verses ought to link to each of the 2 middle lines. In doing this we decided not to worry about a theme. However, the theme in the end emerged on its own.