Renhai Studio Archives

A Collection of Renhai by members of The Renhai Studio

Chilling Portents

A Renhai by Janice Thomson (jt) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

Maple tree —
through silent branches
crisper winds. /jt

Deepening morning fog — /jt
cackle of south-flying geese. /vs

Each afternoon
the sun dips earlier —
distant range. /vs

Archive Id: 98
Janice Thomson: Canada
Vaughn Seward: Canada
Written:: November 23 - December 1, 2008

Theme: Feeling of coming winter; Increasing Magnitude
Season: Autumn
Kigo: Bare branches; South-flying geese; Sun setting earlier
Verse Form: 2-3-2, 3-3, 2-3-2 (Rhythm)
Process: Forward

Links 1/2b: Winds / Flying.
Links 2a/3: Morning / Afternoon.
Links 3/1: Naturally tall objects (Mountains / Tree).

Notes: The sub-theme of Increasing Magnitude is attested in each verse as:

Verse 1: Crisper winds
Verse 2: Deepening fog
Veres 3: Earlier sunsets