Renhai Studio Archives

A Collection of Renhai by members of The Renhai Studio

Winter Romance

A Renhai by Janice Thomson (jt) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

On the frigid lake
pushing a homemade iceboat
his eyes meet mine. /jt

Down the hill on cardboard, /vs
her foot entangles his. /jt

I meet the girl
from class while skating at
the frozen creek. /vs

Archive Id: 101
Janice Thomson: Canada
Vaughn Seward: Canada
Written:: December 2-6, 2008

Theme: Romance; Winter Childhood Activities; Sliding
Season: Winter
Kigo: Frozen/Frigid; Skating; Sliding; Ice-boating
Verse Form: 2-3-2, 3-3, 2-3-2 (Rhythm); No break
Process: Reverse

Links 1/2: Homemade (Sled / Iceboat).
Links 2/3: Foot / Skating.
Links 3/1: Frozen body of water; First person point-of-view.

Notes: This Renhai is a spin-off of Renhai 100. We were going over some variations of the middle verse of this Renhai and discovered that with a bit of tweaking the basic links could be retained and a new Renhai could be created with a central theme of "Romance".

This was similarly done with a series of Renhai by Vaughn Seward and John Daleiden where a common middle verse inspired three different Renhai:

Renhai 20: Another Scoop; Theme: Horizons
Renhai 27: Sringing Things; Theme: Making useful things; String
Renhai 40: Sunrise, Sunset; Theme: Cycle of change in the natural world