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A Renhai by Betty Kaplan (bk) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

The sleeping mount
rumbles back to life —
molten cauldron. /vs

Dreaming of lake sailing — /vs
awakened... the leaf blower. /bk

A blue sea beckons ...
waiting in the marina
"Suzie Q". /bk

Archive Id: 173
Betty Kaplan: USA
Vaughn Seward: Canada
Written:: Aug 17-26, 2009

Theme: Before-During-After; Bodies of Liquid
Season: Summer
Kigo: Lake sailing
Verse Form: 2-3-2, 3-3, 2-3-2 (Rhythm)
Process: Forward

Links 1/2: Back to life / Awakened; Rumble / Noise of leaf blower.
Links 2/3: Sailing / Marina.
Links 3/1: After (back to life) / Before (waiting).

Notes:
The "Before-During-After theme" is appears as follows:
   Before = Waiting/wanting to sail "Suzie Q" on the blue sea (verse 3).
   During = Awakening from the dream (verse 2).
   After = The volcanic eruption (verse 1).

The "Liquid bodies" theme is appears as follows:
   -Molten cauldron, lake of lava (verse 1).
   -Lake (verse 2).
   -Sea (verse 3).

There is an interesting juxtaposition between the violent, noisy volcano & leaf blower, versus the quiet dreaming of sailing & the serene waiting-in-the-marina image.